Thursday, June 23, 2011

Cliché: jockeying for position

Meaning: racing/competing for position (example 1, example2)

Rewrite 1: jockeying for show, place, or win
Rewrite 2: dancing for last couple standing
Rewrite 3: elbowing for a place in the line
Rewrite 4: fighting over bargains at the sale
Rewrite 5: toe-stretching for tallest

Comment: This really boils down to competition, and there are many ways to win. How would you reword it?

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