Monday, January 03, 2011

Cliché: ice water in his veins

Meaning: cold reserve such that nothing bothers him (example)

Rewrite 1: Arctic water in his veins
Rewrite 2: glacier runoff in his arteries
Rewrite 3: cold beer in his pipes
Rewrite 4: refrigerator coolant in his lungs
Rewrite 5: running on freezing rain and hailstones
Rewrite 6: oozes smoothies through his heart

Comment: I'm thinking very cold and very slow to excite.

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