Meaning: a punch in the mouth (example)
Rewrite 1: fist brunch
Rewrite 2: bare knuckle salad
Rewrite 3: Bronx dental cleaning
Rewrite 4: five-finger lip enlargement
Rewrite 5: party punch served with a five-finger shot glass
Comment: The original was always so evocative and image provoking; I tried to keep these in a similar frame.
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Friday, December 16, 2011
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2 comments:
Your fresh, new alternatives are great!
Thank you so much, Keli. I appreciate the feedback. Some of these are fun to write and the creativity flows. Others are harder than melting granite and difficult to rewrite.
Alan
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