Meaning: better seen after the fact (example)
Rewrite 1: rear-view vision is 20-20
Rewrite 2: hindsight is keener vision
Rewrite 3: foreseen with perfect hindsight
Rewrite 4: seen with the precision of past experience
Rewrite 5: this time you'd do it with prescience
Rewrite 6: rose tinted glasses have nothing on lenses calibrated for the past
Comment: This one was immeasurably harder to rewrite than I imagined. How would you rewrite it?
Also share your thoughts on Twitter: @a_copywriter
___
Revising fiction
(commission may be paid on purchase)
Tuesday, November 16, 2010
Subscribe to:
Post Comments (Atom)
No comments:
Post a Comment